POF : Could I get a critique of my POF profile?

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1. Your profile looks fine. Don’t see anything really wrong with it.

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2. – Good photos.

   – I would change the headline, at least to remove the word « just. » (sidenote: we use just in spoken and written conversation, but it tends to indicate lack of confidence so it’s a good habit to get out of)

   « ….spent the last 8 years in New York and the last 2 in Chicago »
   – These two lines are contradictory – did you spent eight years in New York followed by two in Chicago, or 6 in New York and 2 in Chicago?

   – Other than that, it’s pretty good but there are a few repetitive spots. You use the word enjoy twice and say you’re always up for something new twice.

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